Hi J

First let me say that this is good for a first draft. Read over your statement, there are various grammar mistakes, i.e. 9th row down, (ME time) and last line (AND brilliant). Secondly i would include some midwifery journals, to make sure that you are up to date on current issues to do with midwifery. I would take out the section on a course that you didn't complete. If they want to know about this, they can ask you. The only other thing that i would suggest is to go more in depth about the role of the midwife. Universities are looking for people to have researched this role in a big way, also do you have any other experience, if not perhaps try to shadow a midwife, or attend some NCT meetings, something like this. Hope this is of help and not to brutal, its not meant to be. Best of luck x Almost forgot, split your statement up into paragraphs.