Hi J
Have edited your post and made a few amendments.
Its good so didnt need much from me
Id suggest you add a few lines in about understanding the role of the NMC, RCM, NICE and that you have picked up knowledge and understanding of midwifery language from our educational resources section (I hope youve been in and had a look at the videos and scroll through the glossary? as its all good prep).
Your passion comes through and you were honest about leaving one degree for another and your reasons why and that will be respected - Id leave it in as its likley to be the first thing they question when deciding whether to interview you and if you have already answered the question it may help you to get an interview.
Agree re paras but assumed you just copied and pasted and it always comes out like that! I think you covered the role of the midwife throughout you talk about being an advocate for women, I added the bit about supporting them to make informed choices but the rest is there, the diverse nature of the role, no two days the same, antenatal, intrapartum and p/n care etc..
Good luck and let me know how it goes
Jxx